@bob
Thanks for taking the time to write this out dude
I think the upper body was supposed to be twisted to face the viewer more, but I don’t think I made that consistent enough, so it just feels disconnected from everything. Probably could’ve made it more in-plane with her lower body too. And the arm and elbow I agree with, I don’t think I placed them well enough to show her resting on it.
This was also after I already decreased her bust too lmao
@Master_Dufel
It feels like the upper body’s angle is divorced from that of the lower body. There’s probably a way to do a twisting, but I think it’d involve having either the fat or clothing around the ribs being visibly tugged and tightened. Alternatively, working more on the foreshortening could alleviate the issue.
Rarity’s shoulders look like they’re missing a bit of the underlying skeletal structure. That should be fixed prior to adding layers of fat. I don’t understand what’s going on with her elbow, but it feels rather off. Also, unless Rarity is muscle-heavy, her arm-mass could use a bit of sagging and re-distribution.
Lastly, this might be a stylistic choice, but Rarity’s tits seem to be balloon-like. If you aren’t aiming for that, you might want to cut down the size a tad, and redistribute the mass at the top towards the bottom to deal with fat-sag.
@bob
I agree.
Sometimes you get to drawing and you get a good thing going, and trying to make a whole picture out of that one good thing turns out more trouble than it’s worth.
Me too
The fuck are you talking about?
You do realise the coloured edits are made by another person right? There’s even two versions of this image on the site already.
No problem
Thanks for taking the time to write this out dude
I think the upper body was supposed to be twisted to face the viewer more, but I don’t think I made that consistent enough, so it just feels disconnected from everything. Probably could’ve made it more in-plane with her lower body too. And the arm and elbow I agree with, I don’t think I placed them well enough to show her resting on it.
This was also after I already decreased her bust too lmao
A good cartoon!
But Dufel asked.
@Master_Dufel
You did good on this.
The fact that the head is raised so high from this laying down position suggests an uncomfortable spinal bend.
It feels like the upper body’s angle is divorced from that of the lower body. There’s probably a way to do a twisting, but I think it’d involve having either the fat or clothing around the ribs being visibly tugged and tightened. Alternatively, working more on the foreshortening could alleviate the issue.
Rarity’s shoulders look like they’re missing a bit of the underlying skeletal structure. That should be fixed prior to adding layers of fat. I don’t understand what’s going on with her elbow, but it feels rather off. Also, unless Rarity is muscle-heavy, her arm-mass could use a bit of sagging and re-distribution.
Lastly, this might be a stylistic choice, but Rarity’s tits seem to be balloon-like. If you aren’t aiming for that, you might want to cut down the size a tad, and redistribute the mass at the top towards the bottom to deal with fat-sag.
Could you give some examples? I struggling with the upper body a bunch here and would appreciate critique.
I agree.
Sometimes you get to drawing and you get a good thing going, and trying to make a whole picture out of that one good thing turns out more trouble than it’s worth.